Here is a great song to review your homework from yesterday on the roles of organisms. Put it all together in a food chain Here is a great song to review your homework from yesterday on the roles of organisms. Put it all together in a food chain
Check out these great stories from last week! How did they use descriptions to capture the audience's attention? Post your feedback! Thanks Marilyn Memories words and stories swirl like a windstorm inside my head .Worries are just a companion to everything else going on inside my mind. Everyone says when your dying, your life flashes before your eyes and you see your life in a second .Well those people are wrong .You only see the important things .I remember my mother’s nurturing hands gently putting a bandage on my knees after falling and scraping them. I’m remembering all the wonderful things that inspire me as I slowly slip out of the grasp of life. Thanks Tak. (Ms M's class) BANG! I fell to the crimson ground. A sharp pain brought me to my knees as blood began oozing out of my arm. This war seemed pointless, a stale mate between two forces, each of them rotting away in the disease-filled trenches. It was horrific how one death had triggered millions. As I sank down to the muddy earth, I thought, would anyone be remembering this in years to come, realizing that this endless fighting accomplished nothing? Or, would they simply disregard this conflict, seeking power, revenge, or wealth, starting another brutal, blood-filled war? (Thanks Blue Whale) I suddenly felt a cold breeze on my face, it was like needles were piercing my skin. I hurried out of bed then put my poppy on. As soon as I was done I slipped on my red shirt and black pants that I picked out yesterday. Sitting very still on my bed I was remembering those people that went to war because it was Remembrance day. When I was five my father went to war. He said to me in a deep voice that he can still hear the gunshots in his head. I felt a tear coming………. and another. Homework Reminders: Math assignment - due Friday, see criteria (you have 2 more classes if you need them) Writing-gr. 7's post after you edit (use your self/peer assessment sheet) gr. 6's edit but don't post yet -we will mark your capitals sheet tomorrow Science- task 1 due Monday (see criteria) Reading- 3 examples and explanations for Melody's quote 'Thoughts need words. Words need a voice. PE-tomorrow * Remember not to throw away light bulbs...bring them in for Christmas art.
13 Comments
redpython99
11/20/2013 09:19:40 am
I think that all of those writes did a very good job as capturing me I can't really notice any problems for these three writes.
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Daisie
11/20/2013 09:21:51 am
All of the three writes are very personal I love them.
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Bugsbunny
11/20/2013 09:51:59 am
These writes are so descriptive for example memories words and stories swirl like a windstorm inside my head( Marilyn). Also all of the writes above had a very interesting lead it just makes me want to dive in and read more over all I think they did an amazing job!
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thebluewhale
11/20/2013 10:44:13 am
These writes are very descriptive and have great leads! The leads really make you want to keep reading so you can find out what happens next.
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DiamondPickaxe
11/20/2013 10:57:12 am
I think all the writes we're very good. All of them had a lot of descriptive language. Tak did a good job with words like oozing and how his write was based on war.
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Mrcoolman
11/20/2013 12:14:59 pm
I like those writes they were very descriptive and told the story to you in a way that it felt very professional good job guys!
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Thunderclaw
11/20/2013 12:20:41 pm
So we have to do this Food Chain for homework Ms. Wilson??
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FlameMonkey
11/20/2013 02:17:37 pm
I think these three writes are all amazing because they all include descriptive language and really captured their assigned prompts.
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Paris lover
11/21/2013 12:10:01 am
I think these writes are very descriptive they paint a picture in my head almost like a perfessional write
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swagsterJ
11/21/2013 12:45:56 am
I think these writes have a way of painting a picture in my head and they have very descriptive words
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Grumpy Cat
11/21/2013 12:48:22 am
All three are amazing! I don't know eh itch one I love the most
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CookieMonster
11/21/2013 04:25:46 am
These are very good writes they put a good image in my mind.
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B.o.b.
11/21/2013 01:05:32 pm
The writes are really must have had a lot of work trying to out an omage in everyone's mind
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