Happy Monday! What a beautiful day! Complete your writing draft and design plan for tomorrow. Continue with your reading ...blogging with group, asking deeper questions, using stickies to jot your ideas, important quotes and character traits. Be prepared to have P.E. outside tomorrow...runners and complete change of clothing. It is also good to have a water bottle here.
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rainbowunicorn3321
5/6/2013 10:02:32 am
Why do we have to change our poem because it is meant for our Mom and if we have to revise it or change it so much it is not really coming from our heart like I understand it is also schoolwork but it is meant for our Mothers?
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Jimmy
5/6/2013 12:40:34 pm
Your right but our moms want to be holy cow that's awesome so we can get help to make it the best we can make
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Rainbowunicorn3321
5/6/2013 12:45:00 pm
Yes,But that means that it is not coming from us,like it still is but it is changed alot like for mine i know what the teacher was telling me and how I could change it but then I would have to pretty much re-write my poem
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theboss
5/6/2013 04:51:57 pm
Rainbow, I appreciate your comment. I hope all writing you do this year is from the heart, whether it is a Child Labour report or novel response. I will always encourage you to do your best and will show you how to improve your skills. But it is always your decision whether to try these next steps or not. The feedback I gave you was meant to improve the quality of your poem and as Jimmy said...the 'Holy Cow' factor. As a mom, I appreciate the heartwarming meaningful stories and specific examples that bring a smile to my face and warms my heart. When we brainstormed together, all those details that you shared with me were your stories and could make your writing more meaningful and totally from your heart. But I agree with you, this is your Mother's Day card and ultimately your decision on what you write, as is all the writing you do. By the way, authors revise and rewrite many, many times in order to improve the quality in their writing. Try it, you may be surprised and feel proud of your results.
lily
5/6/2013 03:01:02 pm
2 days till my birthday so excited! ....and ya...i think that if you change what your trying to say though it could come out more clearly like if you said "i love you" you could reveise and say " the way you look at me gives me the feeling you care because your eyes are filled with warmth i love you" dosen't that seem more powerful than a plan "i love you" i think that it does i mean it would be eaiser to just say i love you but you need to put all your emotion and passion into what your writting so it comes out meaningful.
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